Criticize Me: Pretty Flower

In our next class, you are going to read your flash fiction out in groups and practice giving feedback for the first time. However before you give feedback to each other, I am going to ask you to practice on me and my piece of flash fiction so that we can go over how you give positive, constructive feedback.

The steps you will need to go through in class (and start off with me):

1. Gage how much criticism the person can handle on that particular day. As you know, we all have our bad and good days, and since this feedback is supposed to be for our benefit (not so that you can tell us everything that you think is wrong with our work), it is up to the writer to tell you the level of feedback they want on a particular day. None, of course, is not an acceptable answer in this course :-)
2. Start off with what you liked best about the piece.
3. Be considerate with your criticism, that means word it constructively, make it brief and to the point.
4. Be specific with your criticism and praise (give examples of what did and didn't work for you).

So, here is my second version of my flash fiction piece "Pretty Flower."

Pretty Flower (final draft) by Nadine Wills

“Remember, Poppy!” Her mother called as she skipped into the forest, wrapped tightly in her red cape.
“Getting dark,” a voice leered.
“You scared me.”
“Pretty flower.”
“Do you like it? Here. I’d better get to Gram’s.”
“See you.”

“Gram?”
“Poppet!”
“You okay? You look different.”
“Not too different for a hug.”
Her cape slipped open as she flung herself onto the bed.
“Eeeeeeew, don’t hold me so tight.”
“I’m happy to see you, my pretty flower.”
“Well hold me less happy.”
“Did you give the wolf the poisoned flower like we practiced?”
Poppy smiled and cuddled to her Gram.